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Tuesday, May 6, 2014
Thesis: Democracy in Brazil
International events in Brazil have been a controversial issue for many years now and it is now starting to alter Brazil's economy, environment, and society, however, the solution requires not only Brazil but also cooperation from other countries.
Good thesis but maybe change "the solution requires not only Brazil but also cooperation from other countries", to, "the solution requires not only the cooperation of Brazil but of other countries as well".
Identify the reasons for the controversy in your thesis (for example: economic or political) and address the geo-political & socio-historic context in which this controversy is taking place.
Nice thesis Jackie! Maybe change "and it is now starting" to "and now is starting to".
ReplyDeleteGood thesis but maybe change "the solution requires not only Brazil but also cooperation from other countries", to, "the solution requires not only the cooperation of Brazil but of other countries as well".
ReplyDeleteIdentify the reasons for the controversy in your thesis (for example: economic or political) and address the geo-political & socio-historic context in which this controversy is taking place.
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