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Tuesday, May 6, 2014
Syria Civil War Thesis
The civil war in Syria has a variety of diferent causes, it is viewed differently in the west than east, and has effects on the state of Syria's economy and politics.
You're on the right track but need to be more specific in your thesis. For example, identify the causes of the civil war. Also, give specific ways in which the conflict is impacting the economy & politics.
Use semicolons instead of commas, and it is a bit broad right now. You may want to narrow it down before the final draft.
ReplyDeleteYou may want to make it a little more detailed and make sure the verbs are written in the correct tense. Also try to eliminate be verbs.
ReplyDeleteYou're on the right track but need to be more specific in your thesis. For example, identify the causes of the civil war. Also, give specific ways in which the conflict is impacting the economy & politics.
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