Tuesday, May 6, 2014
Thesis- Rwanda Genocide Recovery
After the Rwandan genocide occurred, the people of the country are trying to reconcile their actions, with foreign aid and help from other countries, by changing the country politically and economically but still keeping the peace between the Hutu and Tutsi groups that still threaten the safety of the country.
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
This thesis is a well-thought out balanced way of explaining the complicated situation. It gives a good picture of the problems being faced, and provides a direction for the solution.
ReplyDeleteIn the first line, you should change "people of the country are" to "people of the country have been." Also, you should change "with foreign aid and help from other countries" to "supported by foreign aid and other countries." You should change the "but" in the third line to "while." As for the content, this thesis is well-written and provides a basis for the entire essay. You could maybe include the names of major countries that provided aid, but I'm not sure how specific you want to be.
ReplyDeleteSpecify the time period under discussion (ex. since 1994). Reorganize the your thesis for better flow & clarity. Maintain consistent tense throughout.
ReplyDelete